REVIEW *NOTE

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uwaaahh.

I doubt I’ll be able to put up any of my reviews this week / month because of school. le sighs. I can’t focus on homework, fanfics, and roleplays (omg i’m in 7 nao. creys). I’ll try getting them in by next week.

exo, exo

–Raina

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CELLULITE

i just really like irrelevant titles. and i dont want to do my homework… *creyss*
just wanted to share this lovely selca of me and my eonnie. cus i’ll be deleting stuff from my phone & laptop. sorry if this interferes with my Reviews ;~;

Chasing Over Seohyun’s Love

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Analysis

Title – 5/5

Description & Foreword – 19/20

Appearance –  10/10

Plot – 18/20

Flow – 8/10

Writing Style – 13/15

Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation – 15/20

Overall – 88/100

  • Title – 5/5

The title is perfect for the plot. Its already enough information for everyone to know what the story will be about.

  • Description & Foreword – 19/20

The description is brief and accurate. The foreword is decent-length with credits ~

  • Appearance –  10/10

You had a neat poster, background, layout, and even a trailer! Everything was easy to read with the font you chose. The colors weren’t too distracting 🙂

  • Plot – 18/20

The plot wasn’t exactly original, but its still interesting. I think there should’ve been more diverse personalities in the 3 boys. They all seemed the same, wanting attention from Seohyun.

  • Flow – 8/10

The story felt too slow. It may have been the length or the delayed plot twists ?

  • Writing Style – 13/15

As I mentioned before, it was slow. I’d recommend some more descriptive words ; try to throw in some adjectives in to make your sentences longer 🙂

  • Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation – 15/20

Unfortunately, I’m very picky when it comes to grammar and spelling ; I know your native language isn’t English. Your sentences were confusing at times. I see a repeated mistake in your sentences — you switch tenses in them. For example, “Kyungsoo…you looks frust” (in Ch.2) should be: “Kyungsoo…you look frustrated”. Frust isn’t a word, but frustrated. Another example would be, “How do we gonna start our plan?”. Instead, it should be: “How are we going to start our plan?”

~ramyunnie

Brain – Review

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Analysis

Title – 4/5

Description & Foreword – 19/20

Appearance –  10/10

Plot – 19/20

Flow – 9/10

Writing Style – 13/15

Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation – 19/20

Overall – 93/100

  • Title – 4/5

“Brain” already hints at the plot. It makes readers curious. It’s a simple title & it doesn’t really give you a good enough idea of what its about.

  • Description & Foreword – 19/20

It was simple to read ; The main point of the story was included. You didn’t give out too much info, just the right amount readers needed

There wasn’t a foreword, but credits & links are always good. (:

  • Appearance –  10/10

Everything is actually easy to read. The poster was colorful and also matched the story perfectly .You can already tell its a Yulsic fluff.

  • Plot – 19/20

The plot is original. I like how realistic their situation was ; how their mothers didn’t approve of them. Jessica’s parents and the way & pace Yuri’s brain developed into the right age. At the final chapter, you left me wondering about Yulsic’s son, Leo. Is he adopted? Where did he come from?

  • Flow – 9/10

In my opinion, it should’ve taken slightly longer for Yuri’s brain to develop.

  • Writing Style – 13/15

The chapters were short and made the story feel a little rushed. I think you could’ve tried switching to Yuri and Jessica’s points of views so readers know what was on their minds when certain things happened.

  • Spelling, Grammar, Punctuation – 19/20

I saw a repeated spelling mistake; instead of “sync” , it should’ve been “sink”. Spelling errors were very rare. Maybe just one word every other chapter.

~ramyunnie